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Below the tree,
I'm staring.
It's beauty hidden but so addictive once discovered
Wizened not by time but the wisdom it brings,
It stands, so majestic.
But its leaves are dying and falling from it,
Like only leaves can,
Spiralling so gracefully towards the ground,
Never seeming to get any closer,
Until they hit,
Never making a sound.
I'm thinking how,
Leaves in autumn self destruct,
Its the way the green pigment,
The one that keeps them alive,
Collecting the light from the outside,
Begins.
To.
Decay.
The very thing that gave life,
Slowly starts to kill,
From the inside,
Releasing the beautiful colours,
Of graceful death.
Looking sideways the flush of his red lips,
Remind me,
He is dying in just the same way,
His grey scarf, blue eyes,
Grey breath joins blue skies,
He stands looking spectacular as the leaves,
As he is undone,
As still as the old tree,
His hand on a knot in its trunk,
For comfort or support,
Two of a kind,
The only difference,
The certainty that,
His cycle will never begin again,
In spring.
©2005-2009 ~xSwEetxBlAsPheMyx
:iconxsweetxblasphemyx:

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This is about no-one i know, and it never happened to me. Its not at all right, but i could do with some help, the ideas seem half-formed. The only bit i like is the title, please leave me a comment, or suggestions of ways to improve it...

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:iconiwillbeback:
A cycle of life and death and rebirth. Sadness sprinkled with beauty. I like. :rose:

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Life is a one-way ticket on a runaway train.
:iconcut1up1angel:
I wouldn't change one bit of this poem its pefect,emotional and it has something so real!!!I love it its the best thing I heard well read in some time..... :clap:

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'Living,Loving,Knowing NOT!'-the used
:iconwordsstainpretty:
wow that is pretty poignant for something you have not experienced. i dont see any changes that should be made, only line im not sure about is ''his cycle will never begin again, in spring''--maybe i do not like the word cycle here?
other than that, it is so simple and touching.
''grey breath joins blue skies'' beautiful, captures the idea of the whole poem to me

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"you, from new york, you are so relevant.
you reduce me to cosmic tears.
luminous more so than most anyone,
unapologetically alive."

alanis morissette
:iconxsweetxblasphemyx:
Thankyou so much =) that is really helpful, and i can completely see what you mean, cycle is too somehow cold or scientific to describe this. So glad you like it, n thanks for the comment x x x

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xSwEetxBlAsPhEmYx My giving tree, it hasn't rained in years. i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears...
:iconxsweetxblasphemyx:
=D Oh, thankyou so much, can't tell you what that means *grins proudly* x x x

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xSwEetxBlAsPhEmYx My giving tree, it hasn't rained in years. i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears...
:iconxsweetxblasphemyx:
Thankyou so much, your comments are more poetic than my poems =) x x x

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xSwEetxBlAsPhEmYx My giving tree, it hasn't rained in years. i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears...
:iconiwillbeback:
Your lies are sweet and flirt music to my ears. :hug: :rose:

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Life is a one-way ticket on a runaway train.
:iconprozacnation:
What the heck are you talking about? This one DOES NOT need to be changed, love. Lol. I love it soooo much, especially since what's been going on in my life right now.

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>i> Darling, there's no sense in running; you know I will find you. Everything is perfect niw; we can live forever...
You can't abandon me... you belong to me.
:iconankh1516:
hun that is beautiful and wonderful... makes me wish once again that i could write something that powerful yet pretty...

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So long and thanks for all the fish!

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